I don't know if this has been done (at least this particular approach) but I started to try to figure out a better story arc for this than what happened and found that I think Generation could have been a pretty good flick.
Here's my idea.......
In the opening sequence, we ditch the Enterprise B and most of what happens but retain the plot device of the Ribbon and the two freighters.
The show opens showing the Starfleet Museum Orbital Annex, a cyclinder like station with various 'docks' extended out of it around the central portion and the entire station is covered in windows. On the docks, an old Consitution class (TOS), various others ships, and on a new dock, the Enterprise-A.
The Enterprise was retired some years ago but today is being reactivated as a museum piece and an interactive, solar system traveling exibit. On board for the ceremony, Kirk, Bones, Spock, and Checkov.
The Federation media is covering the event and camera's are every where. The four members of the famous crew of the famous ship are ask various questions from the media and Kirk is some what humbble infront of the camera's. Some throw away dialouge about Mr. Scott retiring and perhaps a line or two about Sulu and his success at being the Captain of the Excelcior.
The time comes and Admiral Kirk takes command of the ship full of retired Starfleet personel who have voluteered to work at the Enterprise museum and various media and minor political figures. With much fan fare the Enterprise pulls away from the dock and juts across the system.
Ok, now the ribbon snags the two or three E'lurian (sp?) ships and a distress signal goes out. Kirk, being the only ship in the quadrant
orders the ship to warp to go save the people.When they arrive, pretty much the same thing happens that happened in the show. One of the freighters explodes as Kirk tries various trek-no-babble solutions. Hell, keep the dialouge in there about torpedo's but slightly modified.
Kirk eventually moves the ship into the ribbon to transport out the crew of the other two ships and watches in horror as the ships explode. Now the Enterprise is stuck in the gravitaional waves of the ribbon. After some bantering around and ultimate failure to save the ship from the gravity tearing it apart, Kirk orders his first officer, Spock and his medical officer, Bones, to load up all the shuttles with the survivors and media and VIP's from the ceremony earlier and to escape.
Using a quick subspace envelope from the warp manifolds (
) the Enterprise is able to secure a safe route out of the ribbon for the shuttles and the survivors held within. But the poor Enterprise is doomed.From the cabin of one of the shuttles, Doctor M'Coy watches his old friends death as the Enterprise disapears into the ribbon.
Shoot forward 78 years and the Enterprise D goes through its little detective story with Soran and such. Eventually the Enterprise finds its way to the Viridian system. Lursa and B'Etor are in charge of a small Klingon squadron instead of only one BoP. Perhaps three or four of the larger BoP's.
Ditch the Laforge sub plot. The Klingons attack the Enterprise D and the combined might of the four warships eventually cripple the ship. The Enterprise D gives as good as she gets though and all but Lusa's and B'Etor's ship are destroyed. But the evil sisters get their revenge when their final torpedo sends the Enterprise's warp core into meltdown and the sauser section seperates to escape.
THe sauser section crashes like originally and Lursa's ship stays in orbit. Picard and Soran have their little scuffle ending with Soran destroying the star and he and Picard disappear into the Nexus as the sauser section of the Enterprise and Lursa's BoP is destroyed along with the planet.
Picard does his little mid life crisis in the Nexus and then snaps out of it witht he help of Gidion's echo. She also tells Picard that the Enterprise was destroyed over Viridian. Picard convinces Kirk to help him in the Nexus along with some of the promiment crew members that was with Kirk when the Enterprise entered the Nexus.
Press reset button;
Riker is fighting the four BoP but things are looking bad. Shields are draining and only one of the four enemy ships is damaged. Torpedo strikes keep hitting the Enterpirse and Riker plans to do something ticky (read dumb). In the background of the battle, you can see the ribbon getting really close. Riker is tring despertly to stay in postion so that he can shoot down Soran's torpedo if he fires it and because of this he can't out manuver the Klingon ships pounding him.
Out of the ribbon, the Enterprise A roars. Though she has only two torpedos for show and even those are unarmed, she fires the dumb bombs at one of the BoP's and opens up with her phasers. Kirk, in the command chair with Checkov on the helm, engage the Klingons with the usual Kirk flair.
The distraction gives Riker the time he needs to concentrate fire on one of the BoP's and it goes up in a ball of fire. The E-A takes out the crippled ship and both Enterprise's harry the remaining two.
Mean while, back at the ranch......er surface. Picard again reasons with Soran and a scuffle ensues again. Soran again pummles Picard and manages to fire off his torpedo at the sun.
The Enterprise D moves to destroy the torpedo and Kirk uses the Enterprise A to protect the aft end of the E-D and in the process takes heavy damage.
But this is Kirk, with phasers blasting away, he takes out one of the remaining BoP's and when the Enterprise is massively damaged, he sets a intercept course on Lursa's and B'Etor's ship that is hounding the E-D.
Riker is giving everything he's got to chase down the torpedo and watches helplessly as Kirk gives his life to protect the Enterprise D. THe E-A rams Lursa's ship destroying the Enterprise A and damn near the Bird of Prey.
Riker catches the torpedo and shoots it down with a torpedo of his own. Riker assumes that the BoP is a wreak and head back to pick up Captain Picard before he deals with the Klingons. The Enterprise then returns to Viridian IV to pick up a slightly beaten up Picard and a dumb founded Soran as both watch the ribbon fly by the planet but not close enough for Soran to jump in.
Lursa and B'Etor aren't quite dead yet and manage to get off one last torpedo as Picard is beamed up. The final damage is enough to send the warp core into melt down but Riker gets off one last salvo and the Duros sisters are no more.
The saucer section does its crash and Starfleet comes to save the day by resuing the crew. The movie can end basicly the same as it did with Picard and Riker picking through the wreakage of the bridge and readyroom.
The end......credits...............
I'm a doctor, Jim, not a miricle worker!
*picks up script and places script into shredder*
