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Give Me the Chance to Be



What can I do to possibly improve this work?

~ver

For a start you can pick a font with decent S and Y characters, they look a bit screwed up and distract you from the content. From a personal perspective on the poetry/song it's a little too one sided for my liking, makes you sound like a stalker or a desperate teenager. There's no offer, only pleading. You aren't saying you are willing to change or make sacrafices that might be needed, only that you want to be everything you think they might need and not what they might actually want. Just my 2p worth.

Is this for Terminator or something?

Kenny_10_Bellys wrote:For a start you can pick a font with decent S and Y characters, they look a bit screwed up and distract you from the content.

Yes I realized this too.. Stupid bitmap fonts.

From a personal perspective on the poetry/song it's a little too one sided for my liking, makes you sound like a stalker or a desperate teenager. There's no offer, only pleading. You aren't saying you are willing to change or make sacrafices that might be needed, only that you want to be everything you think they might need and not what they might actually want. Just my 2p worth.

Eh, it's just my poem. [shrugs] I write what comes to me, y'know. It is indeed more of a song, now that I look back on it. I don't know why I worte it, or if it was for someone specific or what, but.. yeah.

~ver

the text is too close to the edge of the blue background box. try to set it up that it´s not closer to the edge than the guys foot. on the top set it up so it´s exactly as far away as the guy´s foot.