I put together a small slideshow of some setups for scenes. You'll see a couple new costumes, and how non-canon the Endor Rebels will look! There's a couple shots of the interior of Monolith Burger, too.
Voiceovers: I twisted Rosie's arm to do Leia, and I asked a co-worker to do Lando. But if you think you have a killer Lando in you, shoot me a PM. I also have a couple rebel Soldiers and Pilots available. Only serious people need apply. That means, you can deliver the voices in one week. That DOESN'T mean, "I'll go out and buy a mic next week!" It also means that you know how to zip up a .wav file or three, and send 'em to me in email, or grab a free account on filefront.com and upload them there. Sorry for sounding harsh, but I've done enough of these to know what delays a project.
SPOILERS BELOW!!
Here's the third rough draft of the script I'm working with so far, using everyone's suggestions in this thread. I still haven't finalized the end, but I have a general idea of what its going to be. Note that if you can stomach Darkstar's page, the script follows his webpage on the Sullust to Endor trip exactly! Let me know what you think, add-ons, and especially ideas on how it should end.
Fade in: 9:30pm EST (Endor Standard Time) Fade out.
Vader and Luke walking from shuttle. They stop as Imperial Officer comes up.
IMP: Lord Vader, the main turbolift to the Emperor's tower is non-operational. You'll have to use the alternate lift on Z level.
VADER: Z level? But that's at the bottom of the Death Star!
IMP: Yes sir. You'll be able to catch a turbolift from there.
VADER: Son of a....
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Fade in: Day One 12:00pm EST Fade out.
Ewok jumps on speeder bike, and takes off. Biker Scout 1 jumps on another Speeder
Biker Scout 1: I'll get him!
Biker Scout 1 takes off, Biker Scout 2 watches him leave.
Cut to Han, Leia, rebs, and Chewie hiding behind ridge, watching scene.
Rebel 1: Great, let's go ambush that guard!
Han: No, no. Let's wait here unnecessarily for two hours.
Rebel: You're the boss, boss!
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Fade in: Day One 5:00pm EST Fade out
Elevator scene, complete with elevator music, a-la the end of "The Blues Brothers" movie.
Vader and Luke in elevator, about 10-20 seconds.
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Fade in: Day One 9:15pm EST Fade out
Han, Leia, rebs, and Chewie walking in corridor. Han stops and looks around.
Leia: You're lost.
Han: I'm not lost. I know exactly where I'm going.
Leia: We've been walking around for nearly 7 hours! Just admit it.
Chewie: RAWR!
Han: I'm not lost!
Rebel #1: Are we there yet?
Han: No!
Leia: We would be if someone would just stop for directions.
Rebel #2: I got to pee.
Han: You should of thought of that before we left.
Leia: Let's just stop for directions, and he can use the bathroom.
Han: This isn't the ideal place to ask for directions.
Rebel#3: Ow stop it. STOP IT!
Leia: What the hell is going on back there?
Rebel#3: He keeps flicking my ear.
Leia: Knock it off.
Rebel#4: I'm not doing anything.
Rebel#3: Are too.
Rebel#4: Are not.
Han: Don't make me come back there!
Chewie: RRAWLL!
Han: All right, everyone shut up. Let's keep moving.
They all walk forward.
Rebel#2: I still got to pee...
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Fade in: Day One 10:00pm EST Fade out
Same scene: Vader and Luke in elevator, about 10-20 seconds.
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Fade in: Day One 11:30pm EST Fade out
Han, Chewie, and two Rebels walking, then stop. Background is orange generators
Han: Hey, where's Leia?
Rebel 1: Uh, she said she'd catch up. She took a couple soldiers to look for a bathroom.
Han: Well that's just great. Come on, I think we're close...
They walk off.
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(S5 - Day Two - early morning, another day. Emperor-Luke meeting. Big reveal that the Emperor knows everything that's afoot.)
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Fade in: Day Two 6:30am EST Fade out
Luke and Vader in elevator.
Vader: And I'm telling you it wasn't me!
Luke: Well you're the only other one here, and it certainly wasn't me!
Vader: My asshole was burned shut on Mustafar, so I am quite incapable...
Bell sounds.
Vader: Quiet, we're here. The Emperor is expecting us.
Luke: He can probably smell that we were coming two levels ago.
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Fade in: Day Two 8:00am EST Fade out
In shield generator room
Han: Ok, set those charges!
Leia: (looking at wall display) Hurry, the fleet will be here any minute! Oh, wait, scratch that. They'll be here
in 4 days.
Rebel 1: So why are we settting up chages 4 days before the fleet gets here?
Han: I don't know. I'm making this up as I go.
Rebel 1: You're the boss, boss!
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Fade in: 4:00pm EST Fade out
Establishing shot of fleet in hyperspace, focusing on two X-wings.