I'd like to see your degree in English Lit if you're going to "right" a fanfic on something. I also am very surprised you thought that Wong's (note the apostrophe, it's that little key next to the enter and above the question mark) fanfic was mediocre. I thought that it could have been better, granted, but I also thought that the ending was extremely strong (if a bit too predictable.) I can safely say that no fanfiction based on either plot you describe will best Wong's story for story arc, and if your post on this topic is representive of your writing ability and style I would not even bother to start typing.
Heh Heh A question of my Grammer?
I'll answear you the same way I answear everyone Else
My English? Its Fine
Hows your Farsi?
never assume English is somones native Language we all make mistakes
As writing one myself you don't need a Lit Degree to be a Critic,
One of my talents in anaylis of most anything
And while I don't have a Degree in English Lit I do know what I like and don't like, Along with some spiffy English terms to throw in, Wongs Story while nice on the surface after the intiatal conflict lacked any real Drama, Sure you had this and that going on but none of it was realy taken as far as it could have. Charater devolpment was lacking and there was a lack of flow, The set-up was right but the diffrent events did not realy tack togther.
I rated it KJA on a author scale, The fic built up but did not realy come to any real conculsion. It walked when it should have been running, whispered when it should have been screaming and dictated when it should have been teaching. While I don't claim a Eng Lit Degree my Aunt CAN make that claim and while it may sound like a appel to authorty and it sort of is the fact was when I ran it by here she had much the same critisisms as I did.
Thus I felt it safe to post up here on the board
And a final note
can safely say that no fanfiction based on either plot you describe will best Wong's story for story arc,
In which I can reply right back at ya
How did you come by this startling conculsion?
What if Zahn wrote it say
And it had Thrawn
Would you still hate it?