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by kilopi505
2017-01-09 08:06am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot

Many thanks to Atreidestrooper, locki, rm928 and Mjolnir66 of Spacebattles for help and information regarding topics in this chapter.

I couldn't have done it without you folks.

And also, if any of you readers have any comments, please post them!
by kilopi505
2017-01-09 07:19am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot

Hello folks! Sorry It took me this long to update. I was distracted by many things in the last few months. Things like the Kantai Collection fandom, lots of interesting stories on Spacebattles and Sufficient Velocity and Fanfiction.net, and new anime, and some of the topics I researched for this cha...
by kilopi505
2016-11-02 09:21am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot

Hello folks! I'm sorry I only managed to update now. It's because I discovered Stellaris and Far Cry Primal, along with creating an extensive background history of the Ohta family so that I could finalize the details about the new characters that I had introduced below. So without further ado, enjoy...
by kilopi505
2016-06-06 10:45am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot

Hello folks! Sorry it took me so long to update. I was distracted by many things, like Kantai Collection and the Philippine Presidential Elections and then the business of researching things for the story and plotting out how I want the story to go. So without further ado, read on! If you see any mi...
by kilopi505
2016-03-10 11:33am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot

Hello folks! Sorry I only finished this chapter well...last night. It’s because I was distracted by World of Warships, and then with several very good stories that updated recently, and finally I rewrote some parts of this chapter in accordance with suggestions from my beta. So, without further ado,...
by kilopi505
2016-01-22 09:26am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot

Hello folks! Sorry it took so long. It's because I discovered a few new interesting stories here on fictionpress and on spacebattles.com Anyways, enjoy and review ============================================================================================================= Chapter 8 JGSDF Camp Fuji, ...
by kilopi505
2015-12-21 12:45am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot

LadyTevar wrote:Jade and Amber would bring high prices throughout Asia, if they were striking enough. If the Amber had inclusions like Insects, the price could triple. Carved Amber and Jade would sell like hotcakes as well.


How about obsidian?
by kilopi505
2015-12-20 05:16am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot

Hello folks! Sorry it took me some time. It was because I had to make revisions...and I met Fallout 4. Anyways, on to the story! =============================================================== Chapter 7 Unknown location Unknown date Unknown time Ikeda Kurumi I opened my eyes. I saw a thatched roof s...
by kilopi505
2015-10-21 01:16am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: rebo

I've given this a chance, but it's gotten too chaotic to read properly. I can't follow who's who, I can't tell what they're doing, and I am more and more wishing you'd kept the old format of the story. The main problem with the originial was you wrote yourself into a hole with the attack on the hos...
by kilopi505
2015-10-19 02:20am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: rebo

Hello folks! Sorry it took me so long. It's because I seriously researched the fighting styles that I had partially used down there, namely MS I.33 for the Lighteater and a mixture of books for depicting bayonet combat, namely the U.S. Army's FM 21-150 (the 1992 version), the field manual for combat...
by kilopi505
2015-09-17 12:38pm
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: rebo

Hello folks. Sorry it took me so long to update. I discovered Napoleon: Total War, and had a swell time playing as Granada in Europa Universalis 4. And then there's the research for some things...that got kinda out of hand. But still I'm fully confident of what I'm going to do next chapter. Without ...
by kilopi505
2015-08-12 02:02am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: rebo

Chapter 4 Matsumoto, Nagano May 3, 2013 7:59 P.M. Ohta Ichigo As the ghost’s body sank through the floor, I grabbed my wife and threw ourselves at the floor, and not a moment too soon. Bullets suddenly smashed holes in the walls, the windows, the pictures, the cabinets, and all the ghosts who were h...
by kilopi505
2015-07-28 09:40am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: rebo

Chapter 3 Matsumoto, Nagano May 3, 2013 6:13 P.M. Ikeda Kurumi I shrieked. I stepped forward to kill the rat when Ichigo pulled me back and restrained me with a very tight hug. I screamed curses as I struggled to try and kill that thing . I screamed and struggled and screamed and struggled until Ich...
by kilopi505
2015-07-25 12:36pm
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: rebo

Chapter 2 Matsumoto, Nagano May 3, 2013 6:09 P.M. Ohta Ichigo I cautiously stood straight after some time in a fighting stance. Nothing else had happened after the strange activities earlier, and the mysterious cold subsided to manageable levels. However all was not well, for there was something els...
by kilopi505
2015-06-25 12:37pm
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: rebo

Enigma wrote:May I recommend you add the name of the narrator whenever you're switching characters? Got confused for a moment.


Done.
by kilopi505
2015-06-23 01:42am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

Re: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: rebo

LadyTevar wrote:My main problem is the difficulty in deciphering what was said vs what was thought. You might want to put the thoughts in italics to set them off.


Are the thoughts more distinguishable from the dialogue now?
by kilopi505
2015-06-17 11:18am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot
Replies: 24
Views: 5437

An Unlikely Magical Girl and an Unlikely World War: reboot

As I said in the last post of the previous version of this story ( s/3189505/1/An-Unlikely-Magical-Girl-and-an-Unlikely-World-War) I had done too many mistakes, plot-wise and technically, that if I ever tried to edit things away, this story will collapse. Also, I had felt, and been informed, that to...
by kilopi505
2015-06-17 10:55am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war
Replies: 32
Views: 7047

Re: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war

Ok. This is going to be the last post of this thread. No, I'm not giving up on this story. In fact, what I'm going to do is to rewrite/reboot the story in a new thread. I had done too many mistakes, plotwise and technically, that if I ever tried to edit things away, this story will collapse. Also, I...
by kilopi505
2015-03-20 10:08am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war
Replies: 32
Views: 7047

Re: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war

Sorry it took me so long. I had to rewrite this chapter...four times. Without further ado...here it is! =============================================================== Chapter 13 “That’s it?!” I asked in a very bewildered tone, while cooling down from the fight earlier. “That’s all a magical being c...
by kilopi505
2015-03-20 09:05am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war
Replies: 32
Views: 7047

Re: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war

Ok. So I had to make another edit because of the pitfall that I wrote myself in Well, here’s what I changed this time in chapter 12. I cut everything after "They want a melee fight. So I'll give them one," I said in as bloodthirsty a way as I could while I drew my bayonet and stepped throu...
by kilopi505
2015-01-16 08:19am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war
Replies: 32
Views: 7047

Re: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war

LadyTevar wrote:YAY! It's Back!


The only thing going to stop me from finishing this is death. :)
by kilopi505
2015-01-15 05:25am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war
Replies: 32
Views: 7047

Re: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war

I'm back! After writer's block and Christmas vacation to Baguio, after Europa Universalis 3:Divine Wind and indecisions about how long to make this chapter, I'm finally finished, thanks be to God. So without further ado...here we go! ------------------------------------------------------------------...
by kilopi505
2014-11-20 10:58am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war
Replies: 32
Views: 7047

Re: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war

Chapter 11 2:21 P.M., May 5, 2013, Matsumoto, Nagano “I can’t believe that such a silly political treaty was followed all these years,” Mom commented several moments after Ran the inari had finished answering all our questions regarding what was happening. I tuned out the ensuing conversation about ...
by kilopi505
2014-10-01 10:27am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: So I wrote a script.
Replies: 3
Views: 1050

Re: So I wrote a script.

...how long is it that you can't copy paste the whole thing in here instead?
by kilopi505
2014-09-26 11:44am
Forum: User Fiction
Topic: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war
Replies: 32
Views: 7047

Re: An unlikely magical girl, and an unlikely world war

Chapter 1 editing done September 26. Chapter 2 editing done September 28. Chapter 3 editing done September 29. Chapter 4 editing done October 1. Chapter 5 editing done October 9. Chapter 6 editing done October 12. Chapter 7 editing done October 14. Chapter 8 editing done October 18. Chapter 9 editin...

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